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    dots Submission Name: Boiling Frogdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 692



    Description:
       My sis said it was cliché. I told her she sucked.

    I know it is...I like it anyway.


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    dotsBoiling Frogdots
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    Push aside the ignorance
    Tiptoe into the mind
    We can make it better
    With the knowledge that we find

    Combat the evil leeches
    Rip aside the veil
    Free the illiterate and the broken
    From their own private hell

    Knock down the walls
    Pick the words up off the ground
    Take the truth and the unknown
    And spread it all around

    Ignore the propaganda
    The bleating of the sheep
    Sow the seed of knowledge
    And pray the roots grow deep

    Strive for information
    Despite the misty fog
    Use your mind to think
    Or else you're just a boiling frog.




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 16:33:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hehe, good stuff. this was pretty funny -- is that wierd? dunno, anywa -- i liked the rhyme a lot. i think it made it much more easier to take -- cause the message is so important and deep and stuff. it was great. good stuff.
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      i think its brilliant, and so long as it only takes 2 to vote, we should vote it onto the site
    cliché indeed, and just what room does she have to talk, i might ask...

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      sweeet poem. it has a nice beat to it. i dont wannna be a boiling frog.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, this one's cute.
    This one was nice, but boiling frog?
    Well, there really isn't a word to rhyme withfog that means stupidity.
    Maybe:

    "Another foolish dog"

    But still, this was nice. I loved the visuals and the rhyming. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      I do believe I shall take your advice lest I end up frog legs on someone's dinner plate! Great insight in this poem. I enjoyed your abcb rhyme that was in all the stanzas except the second. If I may make a suggestion, using something like "Rip apart the shell" for line 6 would keep your rhyme scheme throughout the entire poem. Nice job, Sharon :-)
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      "Or else you're just a boiling frog"...now that is something I have never had the least bit of desire to be, in fact I've never considered a biling frog prior to the reading of this piece. I do agree with the sentiments of this piece...far too many are happy to just proceed on in their own brand of happy ignorance.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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