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    dots Submission Name: Oh, was I wrong dots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Venting
    Total Views: 776
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 447



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    dotsOh, was I wrong dots
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    Is it just the smoke machine?
    I have no feelings for someone who has attached their heart to a bomb that is about to explode.
    Do not, and I repeat do not expect me to mend your wounds when you burn up in the atmosphere.
    I am not a heart breaker, nor do I mend hearts.
    I simply explore them.

    Walk away doleful soul.
    Pick up your heavy legs and walk out of my garden.
    You know your way out.




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 18:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cool. To the point, nothing crude. Creative intelligence.
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
      "I am not a heart breaker, nor do I mend hearts.
    I simply explore them."

    These are some great lines...I love that. I simply explore them...good one.

    "Do not, and I repeat do not expect me to mend your wounds when you burn up in the atmosphere."

    I loved that too...I wish I had bothered to tell someone that before I got involved with them.

    You did an awesome job with this...I love it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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