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    dots Submission Name: Something To Someonedots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 971
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    Description:
       poem to a certain someone...you know who you are!


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    dotsSomething To Someonedots
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    you had my heart,
    from the very begining,
    you were unlike,
    so very many.

    falling for you,
    was so easy to do,
    my world was so shaken,
    i didn't have a clue.

    you grabbed my heart,
    and you held it tight,
    you were on my mind,
    all day and night.

    i watched you go through guys,
    one after another,
    all of them were jerks,
    but you kept falling over and over.

    i was there for it all,
    just as you were for me,
    we were close,
    just like friends should be.

    i want to kiss you so very bad,
    but i didn't do it, i held it back,
    cause as much as i want you,
    i don't want to lose you as a friend.

    then you made promises,
    that you could'nt keep,
    as much as i wanted you to,
    it's not something i need.

    i'm not mad,
    just very disappointed,
    you got my hopes up,
    then you ignored me.

    i should've listened to everyone,
    when they said you were a tease,
    cause the more i'm around you,
    the more i believe.

    but no matter what,
    we'll always be friends,
    i just hope you realize what you have,
    before it's the end.




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 21:12:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww i love this! kiddo ur an amazing writer i wish i could write like this! i absolutely love this! deff. a fav!<3
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww...sweet and sad at the same time...

    I think this is lovely.

    She is a foolish girl for not realizing what a prize she has before her.

    Good luck
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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