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    dots Submission Name: Think...dots
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    Author: LongPastDead
    Elite Ratio:    6.68 - 34/64/29
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       Think about it...


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    dotsThink...dots
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    Think about it...

    All of it...

    Do you know what 'it' is?

    Because I'm not sure...

    He says he knows you, but does he really?

    Are we self portraits of an unseen Diety?

    When you see that person, do you feel your blood boil?

    Do you picture your hands around their neck? Thumbs pressing against closed eye lids and bloody tears?

    Do you want tooty fucking fruity?

    You're thinking about it now...

    Aren't you?

    About the invisible rainbow coloured hiena that sits in the corner of your mind and laughs when your life is miserable.

    The voices that tell you to stab that person.

    The ache you feel directly in the middle of your chest, not your fucking heart, when you miss something, hate something, love something.

    Don't you want to?

    You know you want to.

    Want to kiss the cat and hug the dog.

    Stop thinking.

    No thinking.

    Forget what I've said.

    And start all over again.

    Were you touched as a child?

    I'm going to set the world on fire.

    Did you know that the world is a Vampire?

    Smashing Pumpkin says so.

    And I'm prepared to believe them.

    Are you?

    Watch me.

    Watch.

    The razor blade does jumping jacks across the girl's arm, carving away what's left of her innocence.

    The man touchs himself at the thought.

    Pigs. Dirty Pigs. Filthy Pigs.

    Is there a clean pig?

    Water Proof Matches.

    Satan loves the little children, all the children of the word.

    I am A-Sexual.

    Sex. Drugs. Rock and Roll.

    Take the needle and stick it in your eye...

    Will you bleed?

    Think.

    Cope and think.

    You know it's true.

    Sins.

    Nicotine is bad for you, but okay for me.

    This is Germany, not Jew Land.

    Sieg Fucking Heil.

    Tooty fucking fruity.

    Edgar Allen Poe was a happy, mad man.

    Go away.

    Rain.

    You.

    The world.

    Hide under your blanket and touch yourself.

    I am skull fucking you.

    Your brain is my toy.

    Think about it.

    Don't.

    Just...

    Live...

    Don't let them make you think.

    Think for yourself.

    Just Live.





    Submitted on 2007-09-23 02:45:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Throw enough random phrases and nuanced ideas at the reader and they'll drop everything, then try to pick up the pieces, striving to make sense of it all. I'm assuming that is how you "skull-[censored]ed" the reader, giving them too much to handle. Well I think it was a damn smart tactic, that just when they read too much and fumble it all, trying to get it in order, that you are straight-forward and talk directly to the reader for once in the poem. It was that knock out punch that makes this poem so well orchestrated. The moment of consciousness where you state "Think for yourself." and "Just live." is poignant and a great way to finish the piece. It teaches the reader a valuable lesson of life, more valuable than any of the other messages or ideas in this piece. If you can't think for yourself, you're just a puppet amongst everyone else. Brilliant work.

    -J
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Forest Saint | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally like it, especially the "This is Germany, not Jew Land. " part. I found that funny. In all honesty though I can see several different messages in this one, so it's more universal than anything else.
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Max Million | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was rather twisted, obsered, obscene to some, but genious to me. I agree don't let the world think for you. Think for yourself. <------------------I really hope that his was the message that was inside of your poem. Because it was. [censored]ing genious I liked all some of the random stuff you placed inside of this poem. It made me feel like I'm not the only person on this site that sometimes writes about random stuff. Great work. Aside from this comment be sure to tell Paul hi, and you keep his ass in line, [censored] guy needs some direction inside of his life. Keep staying out of trouble, your good people as far as I'm concerned, I know I haven't known you for awhile, but you seemed pretty down to earth when I knew you, and any gf of pauls is a friend of mine. Anyhow. I'll talk to you later. I'll be waiting for a response.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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