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    dots Submission Name: Sucky Feelingsdots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 694
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 124



    Description:
       Haha, I made this awhile back.
    It had more stanzas(that I didn't care for) but this one is the best. Enjoy.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSucky Feelingsdots
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    What am I, defective?
    What am I, a mess?
    Please just start to like me,
    Metamorph into the best.




    Submitted on 2007-09-23 03:18:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This piece is so good,
    I don't think it is your best,
    But why can't you include,
    Any of the rest?

    I can feel this, but it's so tiny. Feed me. Like MC White says, I think you should add to it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. I wish it was part of a bigger piece though. Maybe now that you know how you like the stanzas to sound you could make more like this?
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting.

    Feels like it needs more, though.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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