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    dots Submission Name: Chalkboarddots
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    Author: GOGO1877
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 32/128/81
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A flaw is a bliss of the human body
    don't lock them up in a box to perish
    a lfaw is attraction of the human body
    don't let them get to anyone
    locking doors and boarding up walls
    crashing through the windows
    we never boarded up
    and they get to us
    tell me, did they hurt you?
    they are only rebels in our minds

    just close your eyes
    then we can make it this time
    we got rules we'll break it
    i don't mind writting lines

    "rebelion is normal, common sense is a flaw"




    Submitted on 2007-09-23 12:02:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "people say that you'll die faster than without water" - win butler of the arcade fire (from "rebellion (lies)")

    i must dissagree with dimension x on the use of "it". for some reason i find it charming and suitable. but, yeah spell check it. anyway, this is another really good write. it got off to a slightly slower start, but this was really nice. i like how this presents reasoning that is rather impossable to dissagree with. rebellion isn't bad, it's part of the growing mind. and flaws are beautiful, that's why just about every model looks like crap to the un-media brainwashed eye. that was my rant anyway this was really good. you continue to impress me. kickass.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Another brilliant piece.

    Check this one over again for small typos.

    besides that, it is (once again) amazing.

    You have an knack for brilliant wording.

    "we got rueles we'll break it"

    this line..I'm thinking maybe "we got rules, we'll break them"

    unless the 'it' is referring to the 'it' in the prior sentence.

    alright. that's it. I'm done. Kudos.

    -Sandi
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]



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