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    dots Submission Name: You IIdots
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    Author: deranged shadow
    ASL Info:    21/M/Niceville Fl.
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 31/14/14
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 64
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 835



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       Another dark day.


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    dotsYou IIdots
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    Can you read my eyes?
    Can you sense the fury within my soul?
    Do you feel the hair on the back of my neck?

    You think you’re better
    You think you’re awesome
    You think you’re untouchable
    My knife says otherwise

    My fingers tremble
    The task at hand almost crippling
    This pleasure is mine and mine alone

    The blood pumps
    The shivers come
    The numbing feeling presents itself
    Like a cold night engrossing my body with its pleasurable pain

    Ecstasy almost upon me as I slit your throat
    The blood bubbles from your flesh
    The silent scream from your open mouth

    I live for your pain
    You stared for so long
    But now you stare no more
    Because now your life is gone




    Submitted on 2007-09-23 19:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you stanzas were a litte off
    but the rhythm was good
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]



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