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    dots Submission Name: All in a Lifetimedots
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    Author: DeepsLighter
    ASL Info:    17/f/Brazil
    Elite Ratio:    7.89 - 97/62/14
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 567



    Description:
       its sad that my posts are like ones that i have to do for school .. hahaha ..
    anyways i figured since i wrote this and its been forever since i've posted something here .. here it is


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAll in a Lifetimedots
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    Sent at any time or season,
    We come here not knowing why.
    We come seeking reason
    That most of us defy.
    Sent into the dark world,
    We stretch our hands, yearning for light,
    But throughout our walk, we are hurled -
    Hurled into a corner so tight.
    Confronted by worldviews,
    Blinded by a plethora of theories,
    We decide to get high on booze.
    But we can always overcome the boundaries.

    Life is a long walk in search for truth,
    But if we seek, we will find our booth.




    Submitted on 2007-09-23 21:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Why are the last two lines spaced apart?
    If there is no good reason for that change it or something. Bah.

    Plethora. Haha. I like it, but wouldn't read it twice - lacks feeling.

    That's honesty for you,
    M.
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Mandolin | [ Reply to This ]


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