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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Yep, this is pretty much it. A shitty poem about this horrible feeling. I almost feel sick, like I'm crazy or something. Read my latest journal. You'll understand. I hope to GOD that no one I know somehow finds this site and finds this poem and puts two and two together and goes "OH MY GAWD! GUESS WHO SHE LOOOOVES!!!!! I GOTTA GO TELL HIIIIMMM!" That'll be the end of me.

    See folks. I am normal... in some aspects.

    *Oh and seriously... asking advice here... should I just tell him? Or be a chicken shit and give him this and run away? (if I did the latter I'd probably avoid him like the plague, haha... I'm so stupid)


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    Dude, you've shot me spinning in a spaceship
    To the moon
    And back a million-ga-silly-jillion times
    I think that's why my stomach is so upset
    Kinda like me right now
    Tripping on my words like I'm on LSD
    But those bright colours is a hallucination
    I can't deal with
    And these memories of you and I
    While they're so few, they're so sweet
    And so crazy random; a bit like Jones Soda
    You think?
    It's a good thing they're free 'cuz I'm pretty poor
    But you're driving me insane
    Everything I see
    And everything I do
    Reminds me of something you've said
    Reminds me of you
    Burns me like acid
    It's so unexplainable
    And to tell you the truth
    I feel pretty stupid feeling this way
    And I'm really inclined to shoot myself
    For telling you all of this
    But it has to be said if I'm being shot to the moon
    Both mid-night and mid-day
    I've been thinking and planning on
    Spreading the wings I obviously don't have
    But wouldn't that be crazy?
    And moving kinda far away and so Mr. Lover of Narwhals
    Would you care if I left?
    Am I just a silly girl for saying this and feeling this?





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      Doppelganger
    No your not a silly little girl at all
    In fact your bio herer says your 18 so you my Friend are an adult
    My advice would be to tell Shawn just how you feel
    YUou willnever know what could have been if you dont at least try to let him know
    Its obvious this feeling of Love is eating you alive and its also obvious this feeling aint gonna go away with out at least trying to gain his Love
    I really like the word you used in this poem a million ga silly jillion times
    That shows you have a Great sense of humor and to tell you the truth I know from reading your writes your a strong personwho I know can deal with rejection if that is what happens
    Remain Positive
    THATS THE KEY
    I will be Praying for you
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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