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    dots Submission Name: Empty Tears.dots
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    Author: YC013
    ASL Info:    21/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 16/12/19
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 723
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 534



    Description:
       September 21, 2007.


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    dotsEmpty Tears.dots
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    Empty tears stream down my face
    As I sit here pondering upon my existence.
    I fear growing old more than I do dying.
    I'd say I want to grow old with you, but I'd be lying.
    I have found the companionship I have always wanted.
    Yet I can't fine myself content.
    As much as I love you, I still desire the day that my heart stops beating.
    I'm sorry that's how I am feeling.
    These thoughts torture me.
    The day they stop will be that day I stop breathing.




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 07:10:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it.
    I can say that i almost can relate to feeling this way.
    It is short and sweet.
    Comment on mine.
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by Jay92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really relate, It would be a lie if i said i had no thoughts like this. This really makes you feel empty.

    About a year ago, i told my girlfriend something like this, not as poetic. Nothing good came of it.

    Very, very good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by MindRape | [ Reply to This ]


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