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    dots Submission Name: A love that is notdots
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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 625
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA love that is notdots
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    What is it that is with me
    I feel this thing that makes me something
    It makes me feel good
    Feel good?
    I never thought I would see the day
    Or think that I would say it

    It comes to me like a plague
    Some how I like it
    I like the way I have become
    I can sleep better now
    Anger does not effect me as much
    But it’s still there

    I watched this in a movie once
    They were happy
    I would like to be that too
    Maybe I can?
    Let’s see if I wake up
    It could be real

    I pray I can see you again
    Maybe tomorrow?
    We can talk about things
    Life and stuff
    I wish you were here
    Or better… real.




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 08:51:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      My first impression: I am feeling it! I like the concept. You make it seem like you are talking about an actual person. Only the title of the poem kind of gave it away. I would change the title to something more mysterious. I love the very end it is brilliant!! Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Miss Understood | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, but it could use some stronger words, words like "stuff" and "things" make it seem like a child is writing it.

    I do get the meaning, this is a lot how i feel now.
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by MindRape | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem I can relate to the feeling.
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Lost-Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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