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    dots Submission Name: Let me be your sunshinedots
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    Author: swiftless
    ASL Info:    29/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 12/6/5
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 719
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    Description:
       A little something I wrote with thoughts of being "There" for a dear friend. Writing like this helps me to be clear and focused when I am truly needed.


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    dotsLet me be your sunshinedots
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    Let me be your sunshine.
    free and strong, dropping rays
    to clear your strains and trials.

    washing you with light and desire,
    my glow reigns true in salute
    to all that is positive and free.

    You see your sorted troubles
    as if they were unpassable.
    I stand before you in disbelief.

    We exist today in strength and
    harmony that rivals no other
    our spirits as one, as always.

    While simple, I offer you me,
    with the humble promise
    of truth and honesty.

    I choose to be your light
    and to overcome your angst.
    I am love unconditional.

    I will show you the way,
    and endeavor to be your guide.
    for I am your sunshine.




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 08:54:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THIS IS SIMILIAR TO MY POEM "SUNSHINE"..I REALLY ENJOYED THIS PIECE..IT HAS GOOD WORDING AND IMAGERY..VERY POETIC..VERY NICE
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      I think sometimes we all need a person like that - Someone who cares so much about us they are always here for us no matter what the cost, and they'll always show us the way because they're here to help us when they know they are needed and when we need the comfort, the help, and the strength to carry on.

    This poem may not have a rhyme scheme or rhythm, but I'll tell you it gets the point across Thanks much for sharing, keep on writing

    -Sere
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Lil Sere | [ Reply to This ]


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