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    dots Submission Name: Stale Terror is Dishonestdots
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    Author: Mandolin
    ASL Info:    10/15/89
    Elite Ratio:    5.4 - 131/145/85
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 477



    Description:
       I am weary, worrying, terrified, and mostly - disappointing.

    I want so badly to be whoever it is that you think I am, whoever that is that you love.


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    dotsStale Terror is Dishonestdots
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    Explanations won’t excuse
    being hidden without finding.
    What’s needed is courage to say,
    “Here I am. Come find me.”
    I am inadequate,
    you wouldn’t like me.
    Free-falling into the well,
    that makes a featureless wall.
    Deep. Sunk. Fallen.
    Surrounded. Pinned.
    Cut away from you,
    cut away from myself.
    Underground,
    what’s needed to be said is,
    “This is me. Do you forgive me?”




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 10:25:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure if I understand this piece or not, which frustrates me.
    My initial impression was that the speaker is frusrated by someone else, probably someone they hold dear, that has somehow wronged them. The speaker feels that by being too afraid to confess and handle the issue, their beloved is doing them wrong.

    If that's the case,
    I agree one hundered percent
    and totally relate to that kind of betrayel.

    But...
    I'm probably wrong.

    Ha, ha.

    XOXO,
    RAE
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Puzzle_d_Box | [ Reply to This ]



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