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    dots Submission Name: Fate, my apologiesdots
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    Author: swiftless
    ASL Info:    29/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 12/6/5
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       highlighting my constant struggle between the acceptance of fate and accepting that which I cannot control.

    Sometimes we are forced to let life happen, and to accept it. Good or bad.

    Do we choose to be bound by the negative? or learn from the struggle and grow.


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    dotsFate, my apologiesdots
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    Fate, my apologies.
    I question you not, but this concerns you.
    We are your children of this im sure.
    but let this go? I am unable.

    With the passion of fist-fighting youth,
    Fate, I am angry. So angry into my core.
    I lash out at you, struggling to hurt you as you me.
    I reject your lessons. I reject their truth.

    Your lessons cut me and scar me.
    I will heal though I will be forever marked.
    By your hand will I grow and learn,
    with calloused skin as a reminder.

    Fate, my apologies.
    I comprehend your stopless advance.
    Like a river flows along its channel forever.
    Changing course, but not destination.

    To myself, hurt, caused by mine own rejection.
    Lessons to learn. Push and be pushed.
    Step back and befall. Relax and be true.
    accept and be blessed with understanding.

    Fate, my apologies.
    I questioned you, but this does not concern you.
    As your child, I am taught by your hand.
    But to let go? No. To accept and understand.




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 10:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is about you and your feelings on fate...but i kinda have made my own interpertation and what it makes me think of....and that is not only fate...but also faith...and here is why....

    Faith is one thing i have always struggled with...I was raised as a christian...but growing up i often spent alot of time questioning...well why do i have to believe this???I left any type of faith i had behind in my early 20's and never gave it much thougth...until...one day...i had this sudden thirst to know more. I researched the internet about different religions...Still disastified...I couldnt seem to find the answers to my questions. I guess what I am getting at in so many words is that i kinda relate to this...You have put to paper every struggle i have had with faith and religion in the course of my short life...

    I very much believe in god...but...i also believe god is what is in our hearts...In order to have faith in god you must have faith within your heart...I hope that makes sense...

    As far as my feelings on fate....my grandmother always says to me....Everything happens for a reason....I just wanted to know those reasons and who was behind it all!!!Which lead me to my struggle in faith!!!sorry to bore ya with my rambling....

    I really am drawn into this write.It echos all to familiar conversations with myself over what it is i really believe in...
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by anile2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This a very well written poem. Unfortunately, I have to disagree with you about fate. People are not under the control of fate. The Bible says that "time and unforeseen circumstance befall us all", but it doesn't say that we are ruled by fate. That would not be kind on God's part. God is loving and wise, so why would he fate someone to die or be hurt? It just doesn't make sense.

    Anyways, my view of fate beside, I still think that you wrote this very well. I like how you took fate and personified it. And the very fact that you are talking to fate seems interesting and compelling.

    I'm going to make this one a favourite, since I find it very thoughtful and well written.

    Keep up the good writing!
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]



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