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    dots Submission Name: How the sunlight dances...dots
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    Author: manwithnoname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314/278/117
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1195
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    Description:
       I've decided to start writing some poems in the style of E.E. Cummings. His are really neat, both visually and audibly.


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    dotsHow the sunlight dances...dots
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    Howthe
    Sun
    lightdancesfree
    (ly) and kic
    ksupthed
    u
    st
    of a lazy, hazy
    noon si;es
    ta




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 11:06:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I admire you for the bravery of this piece.

    To me, this came across as a persona who is making it up as he goes along. As if boredom intimately forces the lethagy and the need to react against it in a beautifully lazy fashion.

    There is also a measure of intensity to it; a quiet push forward as if warding off sleep or trying to find some rational sense of going on. It gives that beaten man feel that is not that easy to write about without breaking a language rule or two.

    But really, we're poets. Who better to break the laws language than us, right?

    Thank you for writing this piece. I think it's beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece with your fantastic art displayed....i do a lot of pieces free-hand and with art so they take on a different expressional persona than just posting them - dare to be different and dare to allow yourself new realms of expression

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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