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    dots Submission Name: days long gonedots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    19/F/The Emerald City
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 695/387/205
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 256
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 696



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    dotsdays long gonedots
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    cant hear the music
    cant listen to the lyrics
    of those tainted memories
    each word is a reverie
    of those days long gone
    i'll still hear the laughter
    and all the screaming
    in my nightmares forever
    used to think i was dreaming
    before reality crashed in
    killed the sweet delusion
    made children of men
    i'd kill for the illusion
    of those days long gone
    when i was still naive
    i could still believe
    in childrens faery tales
    before i was failed
    in those days long gone
    cant listen to the music npow
    cant hear the lyrics now
    of those days long gone




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 11:08:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That's pretty in such a sad way.

    I love the part that says, "i'll still hear the laughter and all the screaming in my nightmares forever." It brings back a lot of memories from those days long gone. Interesting how that can be both good and bad.
    But I'd kill for the illusion of them too.

    I would point out the rest of my favorite parts as well, but I'd end up copying and pasting the whole thing.

    Beautifully done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww...sad.

    I feel like this a lot.

    You've expressed that longing for days gone by perfectly.

    I would give anything to have some of those memories and beliefs back.

    Awesome work.
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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