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Author:	blu_kittin
ASL Info:	18/F/The Emerald City
Elite Ratio:	6.16 - 687/384/203
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Poetry/The pain inside
Total Views:	182
Average Vote:	3.0000
Bytes:	517

Description:
this is how i feel sometimes, but im thinking of it as a diary speaking up

Confess

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sell me your soul
and i'll lend you an ear
or give you a helping hand

i'm your confessional
there's not a thing you can say
that will pas through my lips

sell me your soul
and i'll take your fear
yes, i'm your woman

i will be professional
i can listen all day
and then give you some tips

just sell me your soul
i'll make you feel dear
i'll do all i can

Submitted on 2007-09-24 12:54:03 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "i will be professional
i can listen all day
and then give you some tips"

Probably my most favorite lines.

It's just a cold, to-the-fact point. You bear all, and I'm here to take it. It just screams out obvious.

Good piece. I at first thought it was just going to be another one of those "I'll be your crying shoulder! I'll listen to whatever it is!"

But no, you surprised me. It's a favorite.

Good work.
| Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like the way that you repeat the same couple of lines throughout the whole thing.

Sell me your soul

I also like the rhyme scheme you have going on here.
Confessional - Professional
Ear-Fear-Dear
Day-Say

It has it's own rhythm. However the end seemed to be a little cut off. It felt as if it stopped short, like it wanted to go on, but you couldn't quite figure out how maybe? I don't know.
| Posted on 2007-10-02 00:00:00 | by Spiderwebb123 | [ Reply to This ]
  just sell me your soul
i'll make you feel dear
i'll do all i can

I like it. It seems like it could be a diary...or a psychiatrist...or a trusted companion.

Regardless, it's an interesting point of view.
| Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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