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    Author: rastas edible
    ASL Info:    32/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 10/10/7
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1333



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    a time for waste and bad taste and long lines of white...fiends and friends and absolutely no difference along these spotted roads and black tar dream aways...

    she said that i had alot of class but it was all low and snake-bellied, ragged and worn with an edge to it...class that fit into her night and schedule...if only she didn't have to hold me steady by my hair with her white-knuckled fist pulling out strands that were once soft as rain...now only greased and eased back out of my blue tissue paper eyes...crumpled by thoughts of what comes next

    last call or her appetites or states of grace or a free fall faster than einstein's laws can predict...no flight...no fight...no light or reason...just two thumbs up from the bartender...i nod and pay the man and he slips a sweating bottle into my shaking hand...i could have almost smiled...almost

    hardcore and nothing more...and her mouth was a frantic "O" of lipstick...an impossible shade of red somewhere on the spectrum between new blood and sunrise...her cigarette grew an ash as long as her sigh...as impressive as my thirst...

    but she turned away too soon...didn't see me catch fire, from the eyes first, then the breath, then it took care of itself from there...quickly and all at once




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 19:19:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I meant to post that on to one of your other writings....sorry about that...i best pay closer attention next time!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by anile2 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm really not into the bar scene to much..but I've kinda oddly...find humor in your writing(I'm very sure you didnt mean for any of it to be humorous..so my apologies)....I see vividly the druken dude checkin out the chicks....and sluggishly drinkin down his last bud...you do a good job recreating the images...atleast for me in my head...or maybe I've just been to to many bars(not really).....either way....not bad...I really am not a big fan of the style ya use...but its all about what fits best for the writer...You certianly put it to very good use. It kept me reading all of your writes!! Kuddos to you...hope to read more of your writing.(maybe with a different theme??)
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by anile2 | [ Reply to This ]



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