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    dots Submission Name: lori thinks this poem is for herdots
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    Author: rastas edible
    ASL Info:    32/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 10/10/7
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 84
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       hey. hey! anile2...a non-alcoholic scribblin' just for you...about a girl...and a girl


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    dotslori thinks this poem is for herdots
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    if we were only wax to be melted away...
    wicks whipped by a common flame, we could at least leave strange, brave puddles that would stare unblinking, perhaps forever at the fragile smoke of another summer

    did we come together only to startle sheets
    and each other with wet requests and languid, slippery, self-induced insomnia...or
    were we trading souls...bartering without words but with eyes so wide open that they became fantastic crystal balls convincing us of the future...

    maybe we were always dreaming, performing
    the days fast asleep but not fast enough to escape the inevitable nightmares that ended in screams and demands that the whole world be stopped quickly and just for us...




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 20:20:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "strange, brave puddles"- i like that line, and also "fast asleep but not fast enough to escape the inevitable nightmares that ended in screams and demands that the whole world be stopped quickly and just for us..."
    a really good ending
    the concept of trading souls is an interesting way to look at a relationship or conversation
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by SYnesthesiA_WaR | [ Reply to This ]



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