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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 564
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 663



    Description:
       Sometimes a tough week, smiles from loved ones and friends and the sun shining just makes life a 'ok!!!

    Rock on & BE Happy ES!!!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share


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    Crystal pillars of varying size
    enveloped me
    and each colorful
    protusion
    was a shining beam
    of light
    a moment
    experienced
    NOW ~*~

    Gleaming, streaming
    energy
    Acolor
    Alive!!!

    The end of the
    rainbow is
    only found
    within...

    Color is declarative
    whether
    in divine or sin

    Was "i" worthy
    silver or gold
    an unpublished story
    or story untold?

    Heaven knows,
    Donna Summer sang
    as Fall entered
    briskly
    acolor
    today ~*~




    Submitted on 2007-09-24 20:24:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      happy trees.







    tina
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah...the sunshine that always follows a storm.

    Always a story untold - yet to be told...with a different ending every time.

    Very good comparison on the thunderstorms of life.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I gotta know Tiffany, what song was donna Summer singing during this amazing experience?
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Uh-oh. Fall. And after fall comes...comes...waaah!

    My favourite part of this was the opening stanza:
    "Crystal pillars of varying size
    enveloped me
    and each colorful
    protusion
    was a shining beam
    of light
    a moment
    experienced
    NOW ~*~"

    I can just see you standing in the midst of several crystal monoliths. The monoliths begin to glow brighter and brighter. Suddenly, they all shoot beams of light at you, into you. You are coloured light.

    Pretty cool poem. Why don't you call it "Crystal Pillars" or "Each Colourful Protusion". Untitled just doesn't have the same kick after you read this.

    Keep it up, tiff! Weeee!
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]


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