not, bad. It's alittle choppy, to me in a few areas but the drinking and drugs part is pretty nice. I think the fourth stanza is a little off to me. it seems to take away from the peice, plus the third line doesn't seem to quite fit in to that space.
This has a real easy flow to it, comes quickly off my mind's tongue. It feels relaxed, peaceful, which is what I believe you were going for. I like how it's restful, but still mindful of the real world--the narrator is aware of both peace and life's struggles. Nice job.
My favorite lines:
but only the good ones
the remorse seems to stay
its dulled but it sits on my shoulder's at bay
Submission Name: Circles
