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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 365/575/251
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 746
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       About Cosima and her many journeys and adventures.

    A quick write from this summer.


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    dotsOnedots
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    Dreamy flight over the desert haze of

    One Year.

    It happened as quick as it could;
    Death, the poor peacock beat by childhood
    And to Death, ‘til One Half of you died.

    It takes you a long time to get on the road
    To where you’re going;
    Forget about getting there

    In One Piece,
    Wholesome, Lost—
    A washed up skeleton of the past,
    Going farther back as time
    Goes farther forward
    Meets you in the middle
    And suffocates you
    From all sides.

    You are One;
    One Year,
    One Half—

    One piece of brilliant and desperate Life.




    Submitted on 2007-09-25 01:07:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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