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    dots Submission Name: To My Frienddots
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    Author: LongPastDead
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 35/69/31
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Rant/I am dead inside
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       A letter I never intend to give... Secret thoughts to a confusing friend... God... I hate this shit.


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    dotsTo My Frienddots
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    Dear ----,

    Let's start with the same question you asked me only nights before: What do you want from me? What is it?! Tell me! I feel like your puppet, the strings dangling from your fingers pulling the hooks piercing my heart. You pull with your left hand, you pull with your right, pulling me every which direction... WHAT THE HELL DO YOU WANT WITH ME?! WHAT?! You tell me that you only have so much to offer me, then turn around and promise me the world! Which one is it? Do I have all of you or just part?! Don't play these fucking games with me! Drag out the game time and you may end up the loser with no friend at all. I'm sick... mentally and physically... there's nothing left here for you to take... you have it ALL! YOU TOOK IT LIKE CANDY FROM A FUCKING BABY! ARE YOU HAPPY?! You're killing me... silently... slowly... Be merciful here... Slit my throat and leave me for dead or bandage these wounds and help me heal. My heart's on the damned floor... Step on it or pick it up... What ever the hell you decide, please, just let me know... You have all I can offer, it's all on the table, there's nothing more. Please, tell me... What do you want from me?

    From,
    ----




    Submitted on 2007-09-25 01:12:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Inconsistency really can ruin a friendship, as it has, albeit unknowingly, in this one. I agree and understand what you mean, inconsistency is maddening, and depressing too. In my opinion, if you have such a friend as this, that you should be straight-forward with them as much as you are to anyone who reads this letter about it. You have such a caring heart, and that gives you both a very positive advantage, yet also a very negative disadvantage. From how you spoke in this poem, I'd say that you care very much about your friends, even to a point of fault. That is an admirable quality to have, no matter how many say otherwise. I am sorry that you had to feel like this, I've felt it and it's wretched. I can only hope that you never have to experience that murderous disappointment again. You deserve much better.

    -J
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Forest Saint | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one very strong write where you were suprisingly quite easily able to speak with pure honest emotion
    I know the pain you are speaking of as I have also felt that same pain and sadly a lot worse
    May I ask you one question I am extremely curious on?
    May I ask who you are writing this letter to
    Excellent Work
    It is not easy to base a write on true honest personal emotion
    I hope and Pray by letting this emotion out you are starting to feel better
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for sharing your thoughts here. I've been both on the giving and recieving end of such thoughts before and I can feel the emotions on both sides.

    You obviously have a lot of care in your heart for this individual to be so passionate about what is going on. Your struggle and confusion is apparent through your writing.

    I'm sorry that your experience in this case is so tough. Nobody should need to experience hurt like this, but we do. We must learn from these feelings and accept them just as we accept love and joy.

    Cheers.
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by swiftless | [ Reply to This ]


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