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The truth is hidden within me

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 170
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Its all my last 20 poem titles in one poem.. HOW SWEET... lols...enjoy ^.^

The truth is hidden within me

Go ahead
Hurt me
But you won't break me
Cause in essence
im not there
i'm somwhere lost
tracing memories
and im holding
my heart in my pocket
but something is whispering to me
in the dark
"she stays strong"
it doesn't matter
cause she hides it well
with her pretty little sad smile
thats a true brave face
but you can echoe my silence
cause im feeling weak
people scream lies but
it's true though
You can curse me dead,
save me,
or lie to me
at the end of the day
you'll still be the death of me
and i've told you this
and i asked you why
but you swore hand over heart
it wasn't because you liked it
but no matter how much i cry
or tell myself its not true
but the truth is hidden inside of me
and that is
i'll always change for you
but even through all of this
deep down inside
im left feeling

Submitted on 2007-09-25 07:29:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You've written painful truths about the struggle we all face, or have faced. It's difficult to weigh the balance between leaving your heart open and protecting it from misery. I wish you well! Take care, Sharon
| Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this powerful. Reminds me of a friendship I am in right now with someone, as well.

I really like free verse because I think emotion should be freely gotten across. Your feelings here go well with the poetry style and set up you chose, that was the first thing that struck me. The second is that this came across without sounding like your common teenage angst poem.

Using "Neglected" as your last word to wrap things up=nicely done. I like to put a whallop at the end of my writes, as well.

Thanks for sharing this, I hope your relationship and mine, for that matter, improve so we aren't left feeling neglected.

| Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Sash1979 | [ Reply to This ]

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