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It and They

Author: Angel_Sin
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Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It and They

It and They

move along
live among
dying stars
silent whispers
crawling, creeping behind
translucent walls of eternity.
Tic Tac Tic Tac...
The gutter swallows another soul
the earth spurts in its wake
all that should stay and blossom

It and They
go along
carry among
forgotten poets
blighted side streets
with a breath of renewal
hidden beneath nature's palm

Submitted on 2007-09-26 03:18:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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