Element Pt.2
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I want to make this better. It's the second part to the poem I wrote two years ago. I like it. The first half of this part was composed on 5/26/2007, and the second half finished 9/26/2007. I just picked up where I left off.
Element Pt.2
what i've presented to you. for me? a present? yes, specially wrapped with love and care and fear and happiness and other stuff that was on my mind at the time probably because of you i am so jaded - ? - earth. logic and reason these things i willed myself to have i probably lied a lot, too but so did everyone else. and i guess that's my justification for digging my own earthy-covered grave but becoming hesitant to lie in it i'd rather just burn my secrets. fire. passion and instinct such a pretty way to fall to ashes and who doesn't want to go out like a light? it's probably unfair that we can't have what we desire even in death. i used to love to sing a lot but my voice was buried in smoke and chains because i wanted to become what i wanted to be and my throat was then parched and dry. water. purity and healing maybe things i'd like to achieve, in time, somehow, tomorrow or the next day... but i'd rather keep going like i'm going now. born, catharsis, never lived up to my name and i made my own immune system weak with my behaviors. beautiful? possibly. but only underwater and now it's time to surface and begin to breathe. air. intellect and energy things i want, so why doesn't anyone else give a fuck about them? i'm just tired of exhaustion, and not being able to think straight. what good is intelligence when it becomes an insult? but i promise i am a relativist. so i'll stifle my next yawn and puke out a term paper and maybe then life will begin to ease up. everything is just a part of a whole and most things add up to two. the elements speak a damn world about me and what do they say about you? |
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| Merry Meet Awastedsky. Long time no type. This poem is awesome. I have a poem that is totally similar to this. I like it alot. I like how after you say what the element is and what it represents you write how it is needed within you. Or even how you havetwisted it within you. It's excellent! Blessed Be Andie | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ] | Wow. This was...very..for lack of a better word, intense. | Makes me want to sit and write out what the elements would say about me! As for it being a part two, i don't know. It seems so very different from 'Element' which to me was a writing poem that i fully relate to. (damn you writers block >.<) Of course that could be due to the time lapse between this and the other. Either way i liked how it was (again, this is how i percieved it) sort of a mix of poem, prose, and internal conversation. That's how i read it in my mind, as spoken word. It was beautifully written. the emotion is clear and strong. If you don't mind i'm going to write out what the elements say about me in this format, i'll put it in my journal if it may interest you. I enjoyed this very much. Very good write ('Element' as well), Misty | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ] | |
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