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    dots Submission Name: Element Pt.2dots

    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 321
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       I want to make this better. It's the second part to the poem I wrote two years ago. I like it. The first half of this part was composed on 5/26/2007, and the second half finished 9/26/2007. I just picked up where I left off.

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    dotsElement Pt.2dots

    what i've presented to you.
    for me? a present?
    yes, specially wrapped with love and care
    and fear and happiness and other stuff that was on my mind at the time
    probably because of you
    i am so jaded
    - ? -

    logic and reason
    these things i willed myself to have
    i probably lied a lot, too
    but so did everyone else.
    and i guess that's my justification for digging my own earthy-covered grave
    but becoming hesitant to lie in it
    i'd rather just burn my secrets.

    passion and instinct
    such a pretty way to fall to ashes
    and who doesn't want to go out like a light?
    it's probably unfair that we can't have what we desire
    even in death.
    i used to love to sing a lot
    but my voice was buried in smoke and chains
    because i wanted to become what i wanted to be
    and my throat was then parched and dry.

    purity and healing
    maybe things i'd like to achieve, in time, somehow, tomorrow or the next day...
    but i'd rather keep going like i'm going now.
    born, catharsis, never lived up to my name
    and i made my own immune system weak with my behaviors.
    beautiful? possibly. but only underwater
    and now it's time to surface and begin to breathe.

    intellect and energy
    things i want, so why doesn't anyone else give a fuck about them?
    i'm just tired of exhaustion, and not being able to think straight.
    what good is intelligence when it becomes an insult?
    but i promise i am a relativist.
    so i'll stifle my next yawn
    and puke out a term paper
    and maybe then life will begin to ease up.

    everything is just a part of a whole
    and most things add up to two.
    the elements speak a damn world about me
    and what do they say about you?

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      Merry Meet Awastedsky.

    Long time no type. This poem is awesome. I have a poem that is totally similar to this. I like it alot. I like how after you say what the element is and what it represents you write how it is needed within you. Or even how you havetwisted it within you. It's excellent!
    Blessed Be
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This was...very..for lack of a better word, intense.

    Makes me want to sit and write out what the elements would say about me!

    As for it being a part two, i don't know. It seems so very different from 'Element' which to me was a writing poem that i fully relate to. (damn you writers block >.<) Of course that could be due to the time lapse between this and the other. Either way i liked how it was (again, this is how i percieved it) sort of a mix of poem, prose, and internal conversation. That's how i read it in my mind, as spoken word.

    It was beautifully written. the emotion is clear and strong. If you don't mind i'm going to write out what the elements say about me in this format, i'll put it in my journal if it may interest you.
    I enjoyed this very much.

    Very good write ('Element' as well),
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]

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