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    dots Submission Name: Daniel's Epitaphdots
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    Author: kingsley
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 100/59/46
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       we all will die so it is better we live worthy lifes which will be the theme of our epitaphs


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    dotsDaniel's Epitaphdots
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    He died many years after he was born.
    He left us like the moon does slightly before
    dawn.
    He has gone to a place we all shall go,
    to some he was a friend and to others a foe.
    He is now a member of a different race,
    a race we only see in dreams and know nothing of their face.
    The soil he left empty will soon have seeds to grow.
    The circle of life continues,as some go and some come like the snow




    Submitted on 2007-09-26 10:33:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautifully written. Leaving both the positive and the negative out there to float forever. I really liked the second line.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      sad really. Nothing is indispensable. People remember them for a few days/months/years and then everyone gets busy carrying their own cross and people forget them. Life feels cruel sometimes. Your poem is simple, straightforward and saddening in a alas! way.

    This is a good work.

    Take care,
    -v
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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