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    dots Submission Name: To My Guiding Lightdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 323
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 997
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    Bytes: 2072



    Description:
       For someone. A surrender.


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    dotsTo My Guiding Lightdots
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    Absence makes the heart grow weaker.
    Not fonder, never stronger,
    this is the lesson that I've learned.
    Promise me nothing.
    Do not hint at promises, for I
    --in my infinitely pathetic hopes--
    will focus on those glimmering words
    more than a crow to a treasure in the street.

    This is my downfall. I am aware.
    I take nothing lightly. Everything means everything.
    I hold grudges and hold out hope,
    perhaps not because I am too trusting but maybe
    because I want to learn to trust.
    Yet, when it all comes crashing down,
    I won't let you forget it.

    Promise me nothing.
    Say what you mean, do or do not.
    I am never certain of the truth.
    I know that things are different now and so
    are the words that I have carefully
    rearranged in my heart. They don't
    say 'I love you' quite yet, but maybe
    they spell out, quite clearly,
    Promise me nothing.

    In all actuality I should ask myself
    why do I let this happen. Why do I forsee
    all this trauma, a struggle against my head,
    my heart beating out the bad blood
    that boils with rage and flows with passion.
    Why should I hold on with honesty
    when lies will get me just as far?

    Someone once told me that
    if I want to let someone in I should start out
    with a joke. They dictated me
    standing with the walls around my heart
    and my too-easily earned bricks,
    forming a fortress of colorless complacency.

    In the darkness, you were a guiding light,
    and as I stood before you with my fortress
    your brilliance opened the gates.
    But when night returns, when the rain comes,
    I find myself left alone in the squalling silence.
    Make no vows, promise me nothing.
    For as you once opened the gates to my heart,
    now the walls crumble and are dust,
    and I surrender to the destruction.




    Submitted on 2007-09-27 02:18:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW. I really love this piece and i felt like i understood it all. Youre a very creative writer.
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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