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    dots Submission Name: Together Foreverdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Together Forever

    I hear your voice in my head,
    I'm thinking i should be dead.
    That was always the plan
    to die together holding hands.

    But something went wrong
    and only one of us is gone.
    Someone came too soon
    and dragged us from the burning room.

    In my mind i feel you there
    your gone and thats just not fair.
    How can i ever hold on now
    when your not here to show me how?

    Memories are piecing themselves together
    a good night kiss with a promise of forever.
    A time at the fair on the giant ferris wheel
    the dreaded date night parents meal.

    This isn't how it's suppose to be
    it was suppose to be two in that room you and me.
    Together dying while holding each others hand
    then we really would have forever, it just didn't go as planned.

    We doused ourselves in liquid lighter
    one last kiss and and together we set the fire.
    You sat in the middle of the room holding me tight
    telling me that living without me wasn't worth the fight.

    But things went wrong the smoke was seen
    and the neighbors began to scream.
    People came and dragged us apart
    I closed my eyes and tried to listen for your heart.

    Panic struck I couldn't live on my own
    if only our feelings they had known.
    Without each other life isn't the same
    tears flood my eyes when i hear your name.

    I am giving into the pain now
    hoping you'll be there to show me how.
    Without you theres nothing here
    so numb and cold nothing to fear.

    I lay in a bed not my own
    machines buzzing the meanings unknown.
    Shut myself down starting with my lungs then to my heart
    that's when that frantic buzzing starts.

    Nobody comes so I continue from the inside
    shutting my body down pain and all my wish to die.
    I feel you calling my name telling me i am almost there
    everything sounds so far away but i just don't care.

    Just a few more seconds and i'll be in your arms
    where never again will i be harmed.
    I see the trail your tears for me have taken
    within your arms again our hearts have stopped from breaking.




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