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    dots Submission Name: Another Foolish Mistakedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 429
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 714



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    dotsAnother Foolish Mistakedots
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    Judge me if you will
    I'm in utter fascination
    Of the way his fingers move
    A delicious anticipation
    Has filled my every thought
    It's the strangest way to live
    I feel like he's everything
    And I've nothing left to give
    I want to make myself over
    Become something worthwhile
    But I get lost again
    Every time he gives a smile
    And I want to forget this feeling
    Think it's better left alone
    Despite everything I've said
    He still manages to turn me on
    So I wonder how this ends
    If this frozen heart can break
    And here I go again
    Making another foolish mistake.




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      Who can explain or try to justify the urges that overwhelm us from time to time and mask the fact that the willing recipient may not be what's best for us in the long run. Hell, like blu kitten says...ride with it!
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      if you want it and enjoy it, and its good its not a mistake
    if you learn something, and get a new experience its not a mistake
    its worth it

    but this is a good write, and a fairly accurate one for the way people feel a lot of the time
    and i can understand the fascination, the draw, and the way you can just spill into someone, feel like you are centered on someone, like they are the light and you a moth

    you seem to encompass all of these emotions and thoughts all at once and its like this rush that just swooshes over and through you and reading these pieces of yours leaves me breathless, trying to keep up with each change and swerve of thought and emotion

    i do like this
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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