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    dots Submission Name: Still Miss Youdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    26/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1197/904/224
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 309
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1186



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       I'm over him...but in the dead of night...these things come up


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    dotsStill Miss Youdots
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    I used to wake up every morning
    To find our limbs entwined
    My heart would beat a little faster
    Just knowing you were mine

    I used to lay and watch you sleep
    Marvel at the innocence that came over your face
    Then you would awake and be my demon again
    And I would fall from grace

    I used to live to make you smile
    I used to love you beyond measure
    I never wanted to be without you
    And your particular brand of pleasure

    I used to dream that you'd come back
    That you would realize you'd made a mistake
    And every day was a living hell
    And there was nothing but the ache

    I used to think my choice was right
    That I could have you in this way
    I gave you my body, hoping
    That it would somehow make you stay

    I used to believe I loved you
    But I know it isn't so
    I loved the man you used to be
    And I finally let that person go

    You used to be my everything
    Now there's nothing left to do
    The past is dead and buried
    But somehow, I still miss you




    Submitted on 2007-09-27 19:59:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... this is very sad. :( I feel the same way right now, and what some of us women do for that thing called " love". I am sorry if this was a personal experience of yours, but atleast if it was, you have grown to understand that sex, and saying 'i love you' isn't always enough.

    ~Mag.
    | Posted on 2007-11-09 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well written. I like the rhyme scheme. And i understand how you feel about missing someone you shouldn't. My favorite part is the beginning because that's the most innocent part, when they aren't conscious.
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      Conflicted emotions and sensual memories converge when the lights are low and the mind and heart are most receptive. At least you can remember what was good about the relationship.
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      oh mygod raivn......it never imagined that you would be so good at this but you are, so many times over, and i am so glad i have been reading your stuff lately, this was spectacularly devastating and i cant stand it
    it makes me happy, nostalgic, depressed, wistful, teary.....

    beautiful
    truly

    i love it

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]



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