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    dots Submission Name: My Hopeless Fatedots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 471
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1321

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    dotsMy Hopeless Fatedots

    One button
    Two button
    Three button
    Your shirt is on my bedroom floor
    Didn't I tell you it would look better there?
    Don't even pretend that you don't care

    Cause if you didn't, you wouldn't be here
    And I couldn't whisper this in your ear

    One lick
    Two licks
    Three licks
    You know you're nothing but a fuck
    But I think we both prefer it this way
    You can participate, but you can't stay

    You know you're only here for sex
    And you are very aware of what comes next

    One thrust
    Two thrusts
    Three thrusts
    It's all over with a groan
    What happened to, "I can go all night"
    Now isn't this a tragic sight

    So now you've failed to hit the spot
    I guess I'm just too goddamn hot

    One button
    Two button
    Three button
    Now I'm showing you the door
    Let's just say, I'm not your biggest fan
    We can try again when you've become a man

    Now, I'm resigned to my hopeless fate
    I'll go back inside and masturbate...

    Submitted on 2007-09-27 20:01:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Raivn, this was not only clever as hell but it was bold and open in a carefree way that is hard to capture. Go all night eh...how many of us mere mortal men have uttered those fateful words???
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

    love it....hopelessly

    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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