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    dots Submission Name: I Succumbdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       My ex volunteered to put my stereo in a new car for me...I can guess where it's leading if I allow it to go there...


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    So here it comes again
    I find myself in this place
    You've made it back into my life
    You've come for another taste

    I don't know how this happened
    Don't know how this could be
    I forgot for just a moment
    How much you've meant to me

    And here you are once more
    But this time, you're not just a ghost
    These arms that hold me are the flesh and blood
    Of the person that loved me the most

    The eyes that stare back into mine
    Are that familiar shade of blue
    The lips that brush against my own
    Leave no doubt it's really you

    My mind screams for me to run away
    But my heart fails to understand
    Nothing in this world makes any sense
    Nothing but the warmth of your hands

    And you're oh so warm against me
    And my mind is completely numb
    If I give in you'll break me
    Nevertheless, I succumb...




    Submitted on 2007-09-27 21:49:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Raivn, this piece showed just how conflicted we can be when reunited with a love out of our past...especially one that perhaps left us in pain.
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      NOOOO dont succumb
    but i love this write
    i think its a scary route to go, and its a real fear

    pretty pretty pretty
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful job.I like the way you tell us what your thinking and feeling while telling the story.In so many poems they either tell the story with a few emotions thrown in,or only say the emotions so you do no what they are talking about.
    good write
    -Safire
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written thats all i need to say i think?
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by lyonhart08 | [ Reply to This ]


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