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Somewhat to a Queen

Author: concrete_rose
ASL Info:    31/f/nc
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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This was kind of a personal poem but I feel that people can relate to it on their own accounts.

Somewhat to a Queen

I was once compared somewhat to a queen, equipped with eyes of hazel to burn extreme; holes in the soul of another whom is cold to me.

I was mean't to be born on a cloud, sprouting wings at a young age observing their growth, until I took flight onto the earth.

If anyone should know their future it should be me; so i could pick out my own compatibility, and waste no days washing the hands of time.

If there were no responsibilities I would only sprout babies, and find a lover keen and knowledgeable to bask in the sun, drinking red wine until our loins went numb.

If I was immortal I would tell everyone who ever lived, to respect diligence, intelligence and to carry flavor; their own essences never to waiver.

But when I die I shall call on, seeds of daisies to grow up round my hair, And you shall know where to find me there.

Submitted on 2007-09-27 22:33:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is like that ruth of being a woman
spring and being adored ...i can see how this is close to your heart and to me it shows that you have a good addittude about yourself ... you like you ...and thats a good thing ...good write ... my fav parts were :

....and waste no days washing the hands of time.

....seeds of daisies to grow up round my hair,

| Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
I realy realy like this write!!!! i like the flow and "rhythm" of this write!!!
this write had my attention right when i started reading all the way throught the end....
good write!!!
feel free to comment on my writes as well!

| Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]

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