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    dots Submission Name: Endless Memoriesdots
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    Author: bas
    ASL Info:    24/f/somewhere...
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 44/49/35
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEndless Memoriesdots
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    Look at these ashes of painful years
    (gone)
    and mourn stranded feelings
    (forgotten memories)
    listen to the whispers from outside these walls
    and long for a breeze that carries the essence
    of.....

    Emptiness filled the gobletís song
    through cracks in the cellar walls
    Black vacant hole engulfed the end
    Lost in an endless question of ...

    long for a breeze that carries the essence of a life wrapped in.....

    Come see the roses dancing to the flow of sighs
    and of what was said and what was done sing
    Look at the dreamless sleepers waiting for a sign
    and paint a portrait of the dead, of the days gone

    and long for the day that carries the essence
    of a life wrapped in...I cannot say.




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 00:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really captures the vagueness of sadness, the emptiness, the not knowing of yourself.

    Two people, one far in the distance - just a speck, there is a canyon between them and the one in the foreground is standing on a small circular plateau. They are holding a shovel, the shovel that dug the canyon and pointing - a hand wretchedly saying, "That stranger is me, I sometimes catch a whiff of them like a memory of a dream, like words on the tip of my tongue - and then they go. That is me, that vagueity. "

    M.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Mandolin | [ Reply to This ]


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