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    dots Submission Name: Happy I Would Be?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
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    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Change is inevitable, no matter what it'll happen. So why advoid it? I've accpected change, and because of my childhood I've generally looked forward to change. But because of change I've also wondered, about the "what if's", and the person I would have been, or who i could be


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    Happy I would be?

    God has expressed himself in such a manner, it is difficult to ignore.

    I know… I feel we all have a purpose in this world; God has placed us here on this earth for a reason.
    We are all in certain people’s lives for a reason.

    God had spoken to me…
    He longs to see me smile,
    To see me happy with this life I have been given.

    And, in order to have these things accomplished, my life has changed drastically!
    I’ve had to make hard choices,
    choices in which were life altering.

    And I have done just this
    although throughout this process of making these life altering choices,
    the question still lingers within my mind…

    Would there be some kind of happiness in the life I would have still lead, by not having made those choices?
    Would the structure of my life be better,
    had I not chosen to make these changes?

    Who I am now goes back to my childhood.
    Our childhood makes us the adults we are.
    And being an adult who had an sexual abusive childhood, I sometimes wonder…

    Would the person I could have been, by not being an abused child
    Would that person be more liked?
    Easier to love?
    Easier to trust?

    Ultimately, would I be happy?




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      I'm sorry to hear some of that, unfortunately I guess, I know how you feel, but sometimes we do make choices in life, because when we do we will know they're right, because life makes us happy, reading this, I must have made the right choice in something since a while back, but anyways it was a good write and I hope to hear more from you soon, Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful and heartfelt, searching story, Jackie! Hardship builds character, and I often think it's God's way of repaying us for suffering and tragedy. The greater the hardship, the sturdier and more admirable the character that may evolve from it! It also creates the personal knowledge to be able to understand and compassionately respond to, others trouble and hardship! As we learn from mistakes, also our misfortunes may be the foundation and building blocks of being a wiser, more caring, and better person because of it!

    You write with eloquence and dignity!

    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      ..can you word this in poetry form? This sounds like a wonderful and mysterious start of a realistic story and i quite liked it. It questions a lot, and it questions the right and mature subjects and to put it mildy, it's fantastic!

    -v
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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