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    dots Submission Name: Little Boydots
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    Author: SnakeBite7
    ASL Info:    19/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 108/143/66
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Can you get what I mean? Have you ever seen this person?

    It's not what you think, consider, and really think.


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    dotsLittle Boydots
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    I saw a little boy today, full of life, full of heart.
    His emotions were there, his feelings were pure.
    No secrets, no mystery.
    I saw a little boy today, crying, tearing, fearing.
    Fearing what he didnít want to do, not what he didnít know.
    He knows everything without knowing anything.
    I saw a little boy today, he passed me by without a single glance
    Yet we have seen each other before, in years past.
    Iíve seen him every day, but heís never seen me.
    I saw a little boy today, except heís not so little.
    He is grown, tall, strong, but still a child inside.
    For he will never grow inside, nor would I want him to.
    I saw a little boy today, surrounded by people.
    People that love, people that care, or perhaps people that donít.
    But he doesnít either, so long as theyíre there.
    I saw a little boy today, in the reflection of the morning mirror.
    Heís afraid of what he doesnít know, of what he can't see.
    Of growing old, of being alone.
    I saw a little boy today. Turns out the boy was me.





    Submitted on 2007-09-28 01:32:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How in the world did I miss this one the first time around
    My Friend this write easily could have been written about me
    I relate so perfectly with your words and in fact my upmost compliments you did a Superb job with this one
    Congrats on your first year of school
    I always thought there was something in you reading your posts and talking to you where I just new your future looked bright
    Oh by the way your Journal was also perfectly well
    Now my Friend I can see and feel you are begining to realize just where my heart comes from and how one never truly grows up they just get older
    I am making this a Favorite
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that there is one in every person because little boys and little girls are more attached to the most basic of needs than those who strayed years far from their birth. And that part of us, that inner child, is what keeps us hungry for life and ultimately it is what keeps us beautiful.

    But yes, I agree in a sense that we shouldn't let that inner child run amok. Otherwise, we wouldn't be able to accept the realities that lie before us.

    I think that the simplicity of your construction worked decently. It gave a clear perspective of what needed to be said and it erupted in such a way that you blantantly had both hands on the reader's cheek.

    So yes... you do have a solid one.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this once.

    then read it again.

    I can't even comment on it, because I keep discovering new levels and depths that this poem can go to, and yet with each one, I know that there are more. That there is still another explaination and meaning behind it.

    brilliant.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok so when i got to the last line and read i thought to myself 'I knew it' and smiled.

    So from your note I assume that even though the last line pretty much explains the poem, it actually doesn't or at least not accurately or fully.

    My thoughts are that yes a part of you is the 'little boy' you always were and always will be, but i feel as this was written in a time ascending manner....what I mean is that the beginning were younger years, and as the poem progressed so did the 'boy' grow up physically.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by bas | [ Reply to This ]


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