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    dots Submission Name: Through Chemistrydots
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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    20 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 231/109/46
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 329
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1181



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    dotsThrough Chemistrydots
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    Hallucinations take you back to better days.
    Manic state of mind distorts trust to selfish ways.
    Watching the fever inside of the storm unwind,
    panic wakes and your body shakes the best behind.

    They say, “It’s much better to live through chemistry.”
    Raise one for the lies of a greater majesty.
    Serpents slither through your being for one last night,
    hissing to motivate the presence of dark light.

    What you made was a castle which sunk underground,
    but still, it shall stand in every body they’ve found.
    Mother Earth swells around you and soon she’ll explode,
    but she’s shown no escape, so sit back and reload.

    Destroying a destiny, you smile again
    beneath the bitter glare that you’ll wear in the end.
    Life may get in the way, but it’s no masquerade.
    The wasteland of night sleeps at the hand of a blade…

    bitten off at the wrist, but it counts nonetheless,
    so the world they’ve prescribed seems to be a success.
    You are gone with the poison (one more for the dead)
    and may die laughing, but it’s only in your head.




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 02:15:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Raise one for the lies of a greater majesty." you, my dear, have just made my day. this piece speaks wisdom and anger, thoughtfullness and outrage. i bow my head to you.
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by stasisindarknes | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! im not even trying to be overly in awe.....i was reading this and just...wow! lol...i love this part in particular:

    "Destroying a destiny, you smile again
    beneath the bitter glare that you’ll wear in the end.
    Life may get in the way, but it’s no masquerade.
    The wasteland of night sleeps at the hand of a blade"

    ...when i saw the title it reminded me of a qotsa song...and no offense(if you dont think it yourself) but this to me was better than at least 3 others i have read so far from you....good writing!

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I know I have read your work before Nikkki.
    But this one takes the cake. I loved it! You always have a way with telling the truth with sad under tones. I try and do this myself, but you have mastered it.
    Great write!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I know if I say I can relate to this I'm going to start sounding like a broken record, but Ms. Nikkki I relate and sometimes your writing is so eerily familiar to me I often wonder if you crawl into my soul and translate it for me...

    "Serpents slither through your being for one last night,
    hissing to motivate the presence of dark light."
    Strong and powerful lines here. Again you have such a way of description through metaphoric means - it is truly an art you possess and a talent that is raw and yet distinctly refined.

    What a gift you are,

    Excellent write yet again,
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      You make the dark side of writing seem understandable yet still manage to unveil the unholiness of it all. I think its due to the rhyme and flow you put in the writing.

    Chemistry can keep the headaches at bay
    But only good living can forever keep them away

    This is the part where I say something that says how I enjoyed this and thought it was a good write, but I'm not gonna say that today. I will just say:

    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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