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    dots Submission Name: Forgery is a tempting pleasuredots
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    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1036
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 657



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    dotsForgery is a tempting pleasuredots
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    Beauty is deceiving
    Yet deception is what kept us alive
    Tyranny is terrifying
    Yet tyrant is whom we love so much

    We always hate traitors
    Yet we still can't escape our treacherous nature
    As if we are vultures
    Devours fellow kind carcasses
    We never stop suing pirates and piracy
    Yet we're still blinded by imposters

    We hate the world of liars
    But we never stop telling lies
    We always adore the truth of creativity
    Yet we still tempted by illusion of forgery

    Human demands honesty
    Yet fate always drives us into hypocricy




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 07:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Love this. It's harsh and blunt. We're all hypocrites, I know I am one. We'll all criticize people in the news about drug addictions, and drinking, or even something as stupid as speeding. Yet more than half of the US's teenagers will have tried a drug before graduating high school. I [censored] and complain about people cutting me off or people speeding past me, yet I'll do the same exact thing to someone else only seconds later.

    I especially loved this line:

    "We hate the world of liars
    But we never stop telling lies"

    I don't understand why this has so little feedback, this was an incredible poem, I'm gonna fav this.

    -alex.
    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by screamALEX | [ Reply to This ]


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