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    dots Submission Name: Kiss the Sun with Nails for Lipsdots
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    Author: Secrets Unheard
    ASL Info:    18/m/nj
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 84/101/48
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 135
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 738



    Description:
       Fun stuff. Enjoy it. Take it for face value, or try to read into it. I will explain this to you if you want. it's sort of a continuation of my featured poem. I will tell you about both of them, if you ask.


    Please comment if you read. Unless you're reading just to read.


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    dotsKiss the Sun with Nails for Lipsdots
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    I'll hang this out to dry, though,
    aren't we in the driest of deserts?
    A lizard's skin slowly boils,
    under the unremitting sun.

    Cancer is our sun.
    Cancer will always be our son.

    My hand moves with an iron fist. It holds
    me to this paper, nose flat against it.

    Or is it just stuffy?

    My arms grow numb. My arms grow
    into
    trees...
    fill the branches
    with dust.


    We'll kill this planet. With our cancer.




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 09:36:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I have no idea what you're really going for with this, but it makes me think of love and how love is some kind of illness, like cancer. I'm probably way off, but that's just what I got from it.

    But whatever, I really like it. The wording is creative and interesting (in a good way). The last line is my favorite, although I enjoyed the whole thing. Perfect ending.

    Very nicely done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I'll take you up on the explanation of this. Holy crap this is crazy cool but I can't figure out what it is.

    I like it. Truly I do. I thought it was kind of funny when you used the homophones in that one part:
    "Cancer is our sun.
    Cancer will always be our son."
    I thought that was odd, but it added to the craziness of this poem. It's not very often that I use homophones.

    Anyways, please tell me what this means. I'm curious!
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]



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