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    dots Submission Name: By The Seadots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1039/1111/530
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBy The Seadots
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    By The Sea

    Grey streaks of moonlight drape the drab moonscape,
    Stain with soft silver the clear cracking frost,
    Shadows now move to shape and to reshape
    Figures fantastical like ghosts long lost.

    Grey waves are rolling, weaving their power,
    So long have they rollicked so long have they rolled,
    One shaft of light, an ivory tower
    Mixed with the starlight all silver and gold.

    Banish this dream, ere death take me wholly
    So far from this world of unending pain,
    I loved her purely, singlely, solely,
    By loved linked through an ethereal chain.

    Dreaming of love all sundered and sour
    Here by the figures that fly with the foam,
    Dream of a tall girl, fluted frail flower,
    To weep here below the sky’s massive dome.




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    ||| Comments |||
      nice rhythmn as always....

    somehow this is your usual style of writing...............

    all very poetic...

    Good imagination here........

    I liked the title best.

    Write on.
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was very well written. the flow was beautiful and the words were simple, yet deep. i really enjoyed reading this, it made me feel what you were feeling when you wrote this. i would like you to read some of my poems and let me know what your think. take care.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads delightfully like a mid-winter's morning dream! It has all the magic of the sea, the mist, and a lovely maiden, all bound together in a haunting dreamlike story! Really spellbinding work!
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      ..this was so lovely! It had everything, nature, love, mystery, love, rhythm, language and passion. Great work!

    -v
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      ..this was so lovely! It had everything, nature, love, mystery, love, rhythm, language and passion. Great work!

    -v
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh
    this poem was fantastic!
    i defintely think that you took time writing this.
    one change that you should make
    iss
    to add an extra stanza at the bottom
    to rap it all up
    or a couplet
    just to make it sound better
    but other than that great job!!
    -tiff

    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]


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