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    dots Submission Name: Confido Veritasdots
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    Author: Forest Saint
    ASL Info:    18/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 26/33/29
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 134
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This poem came out of nowhere to me; it was written in about 20 minutes. I'm not sure what inspired it either.


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    dotsConfido Veritasdots
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    The amber waves of sharp regret,
    Would pang their hearts and make them fret.
    Then wash away their sandy trust,
    And 'place it with a flat disgust.

    Rendition's face seems so mundane,
    Their great mistake? Their blind campaign.
    They never saw nor used their eyes,
    To see the tangled web of lies.

    Would they have wept had they not known?
    Thus is the thought I held alone.
    Tis better me than them I say,
    To suffer each and every day.

    Is it evil, this trend of mine,
    To spare them pain time after time?
    Or should I break their innocence,
    And always suffer dissonance?

    My silence always torments me,
    Yet confessing would set me free.
    I'd never take that outside chance,
    And I don't want to start that dance.

    I see my faults and know my past.
    No more hiding, nor running fast.
    It's time to bare my heart and soul,
    And dig myself out of this hole.

    I'm sorry for this beast I've bred,
    Created from the lies I've said.
    I am merely shadows and dust.
    Amen dear God, in whom I trust.




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 10:45:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "The amber waves of sharp regret,
    Would pang their hearts and make them fret.
    Then wash away their sandy trust,
    And 'place it with a flat disgust."

    that stanza didn't really fit with the rest? but it was my favorite. very nice.

    the rest of it (besides the stanza i mentioned) sounds just like a poem i wrote forever ago; i'll fight in my fightingirl19 account. it's really crappy, and even more so compared to this, but i get the same er..."vibe" from it, i spose.


    loves it <3

    ms. m
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Isolde xx | [ Reply to This ]


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