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    dots Submission Name: I Miss You,You Silly Bastarddots
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    Author: LRRolins
    ASL Info:    17/A/A world you dont own
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 142/140/84
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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       This thing that wrote cause I'm completely miserable cause I miss this completely moronic moron..Gahd...>,<


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    dotsI Miss You,You Silly Bastarddots
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    My heart feels like its being ripped out, and I feel so very nauseated. It kills me to know that Iím not important to you; not important enough for you to spend time. Trying to not let my unhappiness show, apparently, it isnít working. What else am I supposed to do?! Iím just kid at heart no matter how old I act.

    This sorrow is like a tumor, a cancer, and itís eating away my life. That stupid parasite is killing me, and no one really cares. Itís sad that all of these people are sitting here watching me fade away.

    Iím playing those heart-songs you gave me over and over again. Playing your last movement in my mind cause, believe it or not, I really miss you. No one really believes or do they even see it?! I donít think so. Man, I really donít think so.

    Iím just telling myself that Iím over you and that Iím just fine, but YOU WIN. I sure to hell didnít lie when I said that it hurt, but I underestimated the pain. Iím still hoping to see your face again, hear our voice speaking specifically to me. Maybe again, maybe again, but I really donít believe it anymore. Would you prove me wrong?

    God-damn...
    I miss you,you silly Bastard.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the last line. And you forgot the "a" before kid in the first stanza. Might wanna fix that. =P.
    | Posted on 2007-10-02 00:00:00 | by Secrets Unheard | [ Reply to This ]
      This really reached out to me,


    In a sense that I've been through this before, and whatever that is written here is exactly like what my heart has been trying to yell out in that period of time. Just that perhaps my words were never spoken, written or heard then. Unlike you, I kept such things to myself all the time.

    One thing to me is that missing a particular someone is like feeding poison to me via breathing air, y'know? But relating to it as a tumour is pretty much alike,.. I think?

    And about the people around watching you fading away, its not true. Its just that your mentality had passed out a rule of 'Faggot Stay Away from Me Cuz You can Never Cure Me' kind of thing. It too for me took quite some time to realise that, so it would for you too.

    Ps. I like the title and the last line most, being it describing the most.

    Good luck, heh,
    Evie.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by AutumnChild | [ Reply to This ]


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