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    dots Submission Name: WTF.dots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    17/f/ tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 297/159/67
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 161
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 541



    Description:
       about my relationship with russell. things are so screwy right now. i just wish it all would end; quit holding me down in suspense of whether or not it's going to work out. just let me know NOW. but yeah and i know in the fourth stanza that bad and plan don't rhyme at all. so i don't need to hear about it. i just felt like it needed to go there. feel free to comment, compliment, hate, and/or trash this poem. just needing to know what the people think!


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    Confused in love,
    not sure what to do..
    to let it go,
    to just push through.
    to fix it myself,
    to wait on him.
    to say i'm sorry,
    to stand firm within.
    to give up altogether,
    to pray for hope.
    to pity myself,
    try harder to cope.
    to focus on the good,
    to analyze the bad.
    to leave it to fate,
    to give in to God's plan.
    confused in love,
    not sure what to do.
    where to go with this,
    i wish i knew..




    Submitted on 2007-09-28 11:15:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this poem. It has a great concept. It is simple but complex. I also like the "flow" of the poem. i agree with the other person, you did use to a little bit too much. You could use should i or just get rid of the to and let the reader do some guesswork. Overall it is a very good poem!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Miss Understood | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was pretty good. i could feel your emotion in it. it was simple and to the point and i could relate to it. i think that you use the word "to" a little too much. i would reword it a little, like instead of "confused in love, not sure what to do..to let it go, to just push through", try something like: "i am confused in love and not sure what to do, to let it all go and push myself through". i hope that everything works out and keep writing. it helps. take care.
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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