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    dots Submission Name: Close to Perfectdots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    19/f/ TX baby!
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 302/166/70
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 274
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    Bytes: 815



    Description:
       just about snobbs at school and how it's so hard for people to fit in.


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    I know that it's impossible
    to ever please them all.
    No matter how hard I try
    there'll always be a flaw.

    I've tried to meet their standards
    and for once to tip the scales..
    But though I do what they want,
    my attempt again just fails.

    I try to be what they accept
    to fit in with this crowd.
    I'll follow this new set of rules,
    only do what I'm allowed.

    And not long after this, I promise
    that I'll be proved right.
    Again I'm not enough, you see.
    Though I tried with all my might.

    They judge my every action,
    I assure you it's not worth it.
    So to hell with their opinions,
    I'll never reach close to perfect.




    Submitted on 2007-09-29 17:28:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Close to perfect is a fun poem to read. I would have said "proven" instead of "proved" in the second line of the third stanza. Otherwise this is a good read. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      You portrayed your feelings flawlessly.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      Your rhyming is very good and everything flows perfectly. Yes, it is very hard to fit in sometimes.. like you said it yourself, sometimes it's not even worth to try.. "to hell with their opinions" :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was good. i liked the rhyming. it flowed nicely. i can relate to what you are saying here. i have been there before. people can be cruel. i thought that you portrayed your feeling rather well. keep writing and take care.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]


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