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    dots Submission Name: Starsdots
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    Author: Fougene
    ASL Info:    17/m/Saskatoon Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 23/22/39
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsStarsdots
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    Does she see the stars at night
    --They are the tears of mine
    Each shining droplet unblinking
    --Another heartfelt tale of me
    Can she read those flying colours
    --Each spelling her name
    Will she spend a passing moment
    --And decipher each note left for her
    And listen quietly, listen silently
    --To the music that flows
    From my soul to her ears
    --That is a sad song from me
    And will she let that sonnet
    --Flow into her heart as it did mine
    To let that lead her into the stars
    --So they may guide her home to me




    Submitted on 2007-09-30 02:01:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Makes me think of two lovers separated by a great distance...lost from each other...not knowing where the other is...

    Or possibly it could be a relationship that ended a long time ago but he still loves her so. So he sends a song to her through the stars...

    A beautiful poem. Very beautiful. I also like the whole "--" thing. Added a nice touch to the poem and changed the flow and rhythm slightly to make the poem stronger than just the words in it.

    Super!
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]


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