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    dots Submission Name: Mouth Full Of Scissorsdots
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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    24 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 238/127/51
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1490
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMouth Full Of Scissorsdots
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    We are only cannibals, blessed with the whitest of teeth.
    Neurotic fucking animals explode from underneath.
    Scissors slice their way out of safety from a cardboard box,
    pointing at you in shame tonight, so start changing the locks.

    Lacerations expose your veins in hypnotic designs.
    Red lights flash above your bed, but you didn’t catch their signs.
    The sharpest events breathe puncture wounds like pink suicide,
    splitting the tip of your tongue for every moment you’ve lied.

    Satan rapes the innocent of glory to watch them cry,
    then chews apart their organs, spitting blood before they die.
    Announce the shallow concept of hope, screaming through the wall
    to mutilate the purpose of your soul while angels fall.

    Feathers torn from sparrows are slowly stapled to your head,
    creating a crown of violence above the mouth you’ve fed.
    Swallow each venomous tear that burns like the flame of a cult.
    Gagging and scratching for mercy, you veil the cruel assault.

    We are only fever’s wings, losing control in the wind,
    once sterilizing pretty things and laughing as they’d sinned.
    Scissors lose their shine with pandemonium subsiding,
    but closing on your lips, you know that they’re always guiding.




    Submitted on 2007-09-30 02:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is some crazy [censored]. I really like it. This has the twisted demonic poetry that I love to read. I think that this has the perfect amount of detail, not too much to the fack that it is nasty, but just enough. I love the way you use so much imagery, even though someone may think it is too much. I love your choice of words. My poems usually have simple wording, but yours is really complex. I really liked this. Nice write.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      yikes! this one is killer! see i told you that you are my most fascinating writer! it's descrpition is as accurate as the blades of sharp scissors!

    matter of fact..."Scissors slice their way out of safety from a cardboard box,
    pointing at you in shame tonight, so start changing the locks".....this is HAUNTING, and i luvs it :)

    the detail in your words of sure consequence are amazing! "Feathers torn from sparrows are slowly stapled to your head"...i can see this picture in my mind...how do you come up with such things? made me feel like it did watching the exorcist!!! it was full of strength in content and style from beginning to end, no dull spots at all...way good my friend :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey look, it's me again!
    haha. I didn't actually mean to stalk you, but someone else had you down as a favourite and they were also REALLY good - so I figured they knew good stuff.
    And so I was right.
    I love your style.
    I've tried doing something darker like this, and I just don't have it in me.
    Our humour may be in the same category of things, but your writing surpasses mine. (And the genres are too far apart in colour)
    This was awesome though.
    I felt so vulnerable haha.
    Excellent!
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]
      this ones [censored]in' awsome! this would make a great black metal song
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      You have both a walk, and a pull. You dont
    simpley wright. You take the reader along
    with you. I pulled my tounge back in2 my
    teath as I read your work....................

    Ya................

    Joshua
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish I could say more. All I can say is... WOW.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
      
    "Lacerations expose your veins in hypnotic designs."

    The images this brought to my mind made me shiver. You have worded this perfectly.

    And the swearing in the second line just brought the whole thing to life for me. Swearing can just express how much feeling there is behind a sentence.

    "Announce the shallow concept of hope, screaming through the wall
    to mutilate the purpose of your soul while angels fall."

    I liked that bit too.

    What a hopeless commenter I am now... I have to get back into practice.
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it.
    It has a lot of meaning.
    My favorite part was

    "Lacerations expose your veins in hypnotic designs.
    Red lights flash above your bed, but you didn’t catch their signs.
    The sharpest events breathe puncture wounds like pink suicide,
    splitting the tip of your tongue for every moment you’ve lied."

    It gives me the chills reading it, but its a good kind.
    The wording keeps me interested. I just want to keep reading.
    I find that to be in all of your poems, they don't bore me, at all!

    Amazing work, keep it up.
    :]
    Brianna

    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by IndependentGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      When I figure out how the darkness you write gives me such light - we shall sit and have a dark cup of sludge together and discuss the pitiful existence around us known as life...

    "Feathers torn from sparrows are slowly stapled to your head,
    creating a crown of violence above the mouth you’ve fed."
    Need you say much more? Yes and you did so with your usual flare and style that I appreciate and respect like you could never know.

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. The demonic rape makes this poem's visualization intense. It kind of reminds me of the Revelation--End of the world. A lot of thought and mixed emotions were nicely placed in this write. Even though it may be skeptical to some, It is truly a one-of-a-kind type of card.

    Favorites, it goes. =]

    Good job. Hope to see another one like this.

    ~Steph.
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]
      this is intense
    and in your face
    and not willing to let go
    it grabs you
    and it mind [censored]s you
    and you cant stop until the climax
    and then you are empty, but not shallow
    a big well of long and shuddering emptiness
    and it is beautfully destructive
    a wonderful explosion of loathing and violence and fear
    if there are any spelling and grammar mistakes i missed them beacuase i was too wrapped up in the piece
    too drawn in

    this is so damn good
    i loved it
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Demonic rape.
    Wowzerz, somehow I think thats a little [censored] weird.
    Very strong words, words used in a way that make me feel like my brain is being impaled with an icepick.
    Its very violent, though.
    Grisly, to boot.
    So violent in fact that I think it killed all tact it ever had.
    I feel that this poem relies too much on shock value and gore which makes it seem lacking in depth when its not.
    The metaphors you use are great, but the gore and schock value just... kill the experience.
    Overall, I give it a C+

    However, thank you for the good read.

    -Kiddo
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]
      "We are only cannibals, blessed with the whitest of teeth."
    "The sharpest events breathe puncture wounds like pink suicide,"
    again i love it those are my favorite lines
    the title is great also
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by SYnesthesiA_WaR | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me want to go hide under the covers. It's really creepy in a really convinceing way. Yeah, I don't really know what else to say. I really like it. The rhyme is fantatsic. The imagery is fantastic. Again, though, I don't know really what you're talking about, but it gives the feeling of being purposefully enigmatic.
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]


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