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    dots Submission Name: Leftover Lovedots
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    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 966
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       My boyfriend was away all summer being a cousellor at a camp, and now he just moved across the country for college.


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    dotsLeftover Lovedots
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    Lately Iím living on leftover love
    Which Iíd hoarded with plans to keep it forever,
    But Iím greedily draining my sweet supply
    Of remembered kisses and caresses,
    Of memories of magical moments
    Which fade with each daydream
    Like a letter unfolded too often,
    And each time itís re-read
    A bit of the love it holds is used up
    Until there is nothing left but words.
    So when you return donít be alarmed
    If I donít recognize your touch.
    Iíll just need some time
    To refill my heart with your love
    And make you part of me again.




    Submitted on 2007-09-30 11:12:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      pretty
    and sad
    it makes me think
    of my friend
    whos love has just left for the military
    6 years in fact
    and she cant marry him for another year and a half
    but only if hes still in the states
    she cant live with him unless they are married if he goes overseas
    and this makes me think of that
    how sad
    and wistfull
    i hope it all works out
    save each letter like each letter is worth a day
    and each one saved is a day with him

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      ouch, this one is quite painful im sure. distance from someone makes a lot of things a helluva lot more difficult to do. like getting up in the morning for example. or writing. or pretty much everything. there's always that one that somehow gets away and yeah, it always stings.

    but buck up, it gets better... at least i hope it gets better. we're all in the same boat here anyway.

    "Like a letter unfolded too often,
    And each time itís re-read
    A bit of the love it holds is used up"

    love that part. there's something old school about an actual letter. all i got are a bunch of painful emails. lol.


    hope everything is alright.


    peace.


    -pietro
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      Good concept, I like the idea of leftover love, sitting in a plastic container saving it for later use. When I read your description, I honestly was slightly dreading the reading of this poem, expecting somewhat of a clichť, but I've been happily surprised. I wish it was longer, but thats just personal taste, and the length doesn't take away from the power of the poem at all. Slowly, yet surely, the intimacy and closeness is drained away until you just have the knowledge that you should loved that person, but you just need to remember why, is that it? An excellent poem, thank you for sharing it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by Silenced Hope | [ Reply to This ]


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