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    dots Submission Name: Nature's Musicdots

    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsNature's Musicdots

    I listen to the distant piano
    playing softly in my ears
    my heart swells with each crescendo
    a smile comes to my face
    I am finally at peace
    no troubles shall find me
    while I sit in this place
    my hidden secret from the world
    my sanctuary, my recluse
    the sun falls in the west
    and casts a warming glow over the land
    the water ripples
    the trees sway
    the flowers stand in all their glory
    everything is atune to each other
    the music and nature
    and i rest here
    glowing like an angel
    as this day ends
    the silence will come
    but tomorrow
    it shall come again.

    Submitted on 2007-09-30 14:41:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      From what I've read of you-angels are a facination. I would encourage you to write more about them, as I can see you conducting a glorious piece (or maybe even pieces). Your ideas are fresh-a good thing.

    The only thing I would like to see changed on this one is add punctuation. Such a small thing can clarify so much for the reader and add to the emotional quality and the way in which the poem is read so much.

    I enjoyed this.

    | Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really really good...i love it..i love writing poems about nature...i love just to sit and listen to the wind...nature holds such inspiration..great job..definitly going on my favorites....
    | Posted on 2007-10-02 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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