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    dots Submission Name: After It's All Been Said dots

    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 947
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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       A couple who are over each other, and have nothing left to say.

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    dotsAfter It's All Been Said dots


    You used to write me love songs
    And poems I canít forget,
    But now you just sit silently
    And smoke your cigarette.

    ďIíll love you always, till I die,
    Until the sun goes out.Ē
    You used to breathe those words to me
    Then sweetly kiss my mouth.

    But now we sit here, you and I,
    With not a thing to say.
    Are we the same two people who
    Wrote letters every day?

    Are we the same two people who
    Talked hours on the phone?
    And now weíre just across the room
    But both of us alone?

    ď Donít you want to talk to me?Ē
    "Has everything been said?"
    You look up for a minute from
    Your book, and shake your head

    I turn away and think about
    The way we used to be:
    I couldnít get enough of you
    Or give enough of me .

    You were so wild and passionate.
    You always wanted me.
    Until our passion faded to

    You used to write me love songs
    And poems I canít forget
    But now you just sit silently
    And smoke your cigarette .

    Submitted on 2007-09-30 18:21:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fantastic poem, I could feel what you are saying, it seems that after a while people tend to take each other for granted, passion fades, but that's reality, Dean
    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      Love lost is hurt and to live is to have regrets. ther isno second wind when it comes to love. I love this it's my type of write. You use great imgery, your ryhme was good, flowed alittle choppy, but it wasn't much. The sense that it gives of want more, and feeling like you could've given more, but now it's all so empty is perfectly displayed. Nice. This is a favorite of mine. Keep doing the good work.

    AeThe Lost Poet
    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed magnificently and the emotion was portrayed perfectly. I can relate to this, but not directly. My parents are going through their fourth seperation and my dad is the one wondering if there's anything left to say. This was a really awesome write. Keep up the awesome work and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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